Elephant Reviews [CFCU]

Eight, Nine, Ten

by ReenRodes

First Impressions (ex. Cover, blurb, title)

- Cover: The cover text is fine, but the pen at first glance isn't very recognizable as a pen.

- Title: The title seems fitting.

- Blurb: The blurb fits the story and provides necessary details

Mechanics (ex. Grammar, sentence structure)

-There were no glaring grammar issues.

-The use of numbers instead of names can make reading comprehension a little difficult, but it is recognized that the nature of the story calls for these names. Perhaps explaining the reason behind the names, or some hints as to why they are called numbers would help.

Plot/Characters:

-The plot is kind of all over the place. There seems to be a murder mystery, a former FBI entanglement, and also an alcoholic. Perhaps it is because it is still early in the story, but maybe it's something to keep in mind.

-It's an interesting mystery concept, like when the mother "slipped up" when she was stressed and called Ninth "Alexander".

There is a great story being told here, but it might be a little confusing at times to keep track of the different elements going on all at once. Wishing you luck on your story!