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First impressions (Ex. cover, blurb, title)

-Cover: the cover for the most part looks good, but it is uncertain what the grey/white design is on the right side.

-Blurb: The blurb contains all necessary details and flows nicely.

-Title: The title seems appropriate.

Mechanics: (Grammar, sentence structure)

There are some minor grammatical errors.

Plot:

-It is advisable to be careful when the main character in a horror story has a mental illness, as not to encourage stigmas.

-There seems to be a lot of characters introduced in the first chapter without a lot of background, so it's a little difficult to track who is who.

-Also in the first chapter, it was challenging to discern what was happening in the moment vs. what he had experienced in the past.

You've got the basis down, and an interesting story unfolding. Best of luck!