Elephant Reviews [CFCU]

The Last Princess

By: midnightcupofnoodles

First Impressions (ex. Cover, blurb, title)

-Cover: The cover is good.

-Blurb: The blurb is fine.

-Title: The title works.

Mechanics (ex. Grammar, sentence structure, etc.)

The grammar is good for the most part, but there are a couple errors here or there.

Plot & Characters

- The acronym VFX in chapter six is not explained or spelled out.

- In Chapter 13, it says "werewolves and humans pandered along the pathway" but it was stated earlier that the manor was unknown to humans.

Later on, there's a paragraph in Chapter 15 that says "This would be the first time so many humans entered any werewolf compound other than..." So it's a bit confusing as to how many humans know about this compound and how they still maintain secrecy.

- It was not mentioned how Helen was able to up and leave her 'normal' life and go live with Lyandra. Chapter 15 briefly mentions contact with her family, but it is not mentioned what her relationship with her family is.

Later on, it says that her parents abandoned her, but then it is unclear as to who she contacted when she spoke with her family.

- The chapters end on good beats, creating the right amount of suspense and conclusion.

This story features good plot twists and unseen character relationships that are uncovered. Best of luck to you in your writing journey!