Elephant Reviews [CFCU]

Friendships and Other Disasters

By: pour-me-some-liquor

First Impressions (ex. Cover, blurb, title)

-Cover: The cover is nice.

-Blurb: The blurb is good.

-Title: The title is fine.

Mechanics (ex. Grammar, sentence structure, etc.)

A few errors here or there but nothings distracting.

Plot & Characters

- In our opinion, it was a little hard to really like the main character sometimes because sometimes her sass came off a bit harsh.

- It felt weird that she was commenting on how hot her dad was.

- In the first chapter, the mood feels a little disjoint at times. One example is where she's talking about her height in the middle of a more emotional scene.

- In Chapter 3, Bruce knows her full name but in the previous chapter, she never told him her name.

- The story doesn't have a typical plot structure, so it feels like it is cut short. Although it is recognized that there is a sequel, there wasn't a climax or defining plot points that were executed in this book.

Best of luck to you in your writing journey!