Elephant Reviews [CFCU]

Dreamweaver

By: LaneyInRed

First Impressions (ex. Cover, blurb, title)

-Cover: The cover is nice, it fits the mood. But it's a little difficult to read the author's name.

-Blurb: The blurb is fine.

-Title: The title is fitting.

Mechanics (ex. Grammar, sentence structure, etc.)

The grammar is good for the most part.

Plot & Characters:

- One thing that we noticed in the first chapter is that perhaps there could be more on how Winnie feels physically and emotionally, to help readers really feel the angst in the situation. Like maybe the overwhelming pounding in her head from the hangover and the heartache from the breakup.

- Some of the words use are nonstandard and a bit distracting. Some words are repeated a couple times within a chapter (such as 'shuffling/shuffled' in the chapter titled 'Electric')

- The pacing was fine for the most part but it felt a little slow in the later chapters.

This story is well written and it is relatively clear in what's going on, which is difficult to do in a dreamy story where the line of reality is fuzzy. Best of luck to you and your writing journey!