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After I Fall

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By: CourtneyPeterman0

First Impressions (ex. Cover, blurb, title)

- Title: The title seems fitting for the story.

- Cover: The cover is attractive and has a nice color scheme.

- Blurb: The blurb covers all necessary information and is well written.

Mechanics (ex. Grammar, sentence structure, etc.)

There does not seem to be any outstanding errors in grammar.

Plot:

- The plot is interesting and it was engaging. However, the fighting at the start was a little overwhelming and seemed to last for a while.

- Sometimes it felt melodramatic.

Characters:

It was a little difficult to figure out the personality of the soldier boyfriend at first.

This story seems to have a good sense of plot and complex situations. One suggestion would be an adjustment in pacing, but great job and good luck with your writing journey.