Elephant Reviews [CFCU]

The Knight and the Peasant

By: SirTurtletheIII

First Impressions (ex. Cover, blurb, title)

-Title: The title is fitting.

-Cover: The cover is alright.

-Blurb: The blurb is fine.

Mechanics (ex. Grammar, sentence structure, etc.)

There are a few typos, but the grammar is on par.

Plot

- The opening chapter had so many new ideas introduced (characters, vocabulary, terminology, etc), that it was hard to follow along. It is understood that it isn't fully explained because it is a sort of teaser chapter, but if it is too confusing for readers, they might be put off.

Characters

- Chapter eleven is the conflict. However, it seems as if there is a third party that joins, seemingly out of nowhere. It could've been that we missed the context, but it seemed to be a conflict between Estevan and Herreran, but Canova entered the scene.

- In Chapter 21, it is unclear as to why the lord granted him access to the dungeon.

This is a very epic medieval story that seems to have a lot of action and development. Best of luck in your writing journey!