Ohana Reviews

Review- Fortuity

Reviewer- kinalhariya
Book- Fortuity
Author- mistopher

Blurb:
Short yet intriguing blurb. The first paragraph has made me curious as to what Bang Chan has resorted for which needs his pride to be set aside. I am also interested to see what will be brewing between the volunteer and him. I have a small suggestion. Instead of Will he seek into Chan's life further and find a place...how about- Will he seek into Chan's life further and find out the reason behind his mysteriousness....

You can gladly ignore the suggestion. I just felt that the current question is a direct give away and steals away the intrigue factor.

Overall, the blurb is well written.

Moving towards the chapters,

In the first chapter itself, I felt emotions for the characters. Curious about Bang chan, sad for Felix and extreme hatred for Changbin, and  awed by Bella's cuteness. That really speaks to how well the author writes. It is difficult to manage that in the first chapter itself.

I just got a little confused while reading about who was speaking until the next paragraph/after many sentences the name was given. I had to go back and read the previous description and dialogues again after finding out which character was speaking to make sense of it. So I will suggest giving out the names before their physical descriptions.

The problem I mentioned above was just for the starting chapter. Later, everything worked out smoothly

I love how the title is shown in the story. It makes it more effective.

It makes me happy that their lives are looking forward. At the same time, I feel bad for the dog. I hope they manage to get together in future.

*****

Characters
Characterization is done perfectly. Not only the main leads, but almost every character has defining qualities. Good or bad, there is something that I am able to feel for these characters.

World building
There aren't too many descriptions, just enough for me to picture the scene. And I like it this way.

Plot
The story is written fantastically. Even though things escalate quickly, they never felt rushed. Every moment was given proper attention. Every character was given their own space and screen time to show what they are apart from their importance in the main lead's life.

I usually don't like constantly changing point of views in a single chapter, but I didn't feel the usual annoyance while reading it here. It works well for the book.

Story flows smoothly without a hitch. Concept is really interesting.

Grammar:
A few typos here and there.
I found that some sentences had missing words. The sentence was still understandable, but something felt missing.

Eg:
Felix was at a wrong place right time.
It should be written as:
→Felix was at the wrong place at the right time.

Last words,

I thoroughly enjoyed reading this story. From my previous statements, I am sure it is obvious how I got invested in the story. The story touches my heart. There are only a few stories that make you feel connected with the characters and this is one of them. Story is a gem. Definitely adding it to my library to read later.