Reviewer: doggx_
Book: Starborn
Author: I seem to tag another player with the same username...
Title: Nothing too unique about it, but the title really described the whole book!(5/5)
Plot: To be honest, the plot is very common in fantasy stories, but I saw you add your own stuff in it to make it unique! It was just too common and i thought that you could make it even better!(20/25)
Blurb: Blurb was great! And it really gave a lot of context about your book. (Note: I really liked the name of the homeland) (9/10)
Engagement: Great hook in every end of the chapter! I loved it! Though you used show and not tell too much which made a paragraph really long, only to find out it was still describing its surrounding (6/10)
Grammar: I don't see any mistakes in your books! Or maybe because i skipped a few sentences.Keep up the good work!(14/15)
Vocabulary: Tons of vocabulary that made me want to write down some of the words. The book has lots of vocabulary which really spice things up, making readers more interested in your book. (9/10)
Character: Great! Just marvelous! You showed the characters using their own accents and describing their personality is good!(10/10)
Writing Style: Great writing style, you described everything so good, even the surroundings. Though in the first chapter, you didn't showed the readers which character talked
Example
"Hi! Nice to meet you!" and continued the next dialogue "Hey! Nice to meet you too!"
"Hi! Nice to meet you!" Akira smiled, continued the next dialogue "Hello! Nice to meet you too!" Koda answered back, smiling too.
So, if you want, add a tiny bit of information at each end of dialogue so the readers will know which character is talking. (8/10)
Cover: Cover was simple, but I was amazed by the character in it. Did you make it yourself? It is so cool!(4/5)
Overall: To be honest, it is such a great book! Plot was doing well, and you really progressed through your book. I think that what you really need to improve is how you write your characters and the cover.
Total:85/100
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