Ohana Reviews

Review-I Don't Know You Yet I Know You

Reviewer: doggx_

Book: I Don't Know You Yet I Know You

Author: aditydhar

Title: The title is making me confused. Maybe you are using google translate to do its job. I don't know you yet I know you are too long to fit on a book cover. If you want, you can always shorten it to something that summarizes the whole book and is also unique. People who are searching for the book will have a hard time finding it. I will be giving it a (3/5)

Plot: The plot was so good and I can see why people really love it! It is unique and how you express it to become a story is so beautiful! (25/25)

Blurb: There were two exactly the same blurbs, one in the description of the book and one in the intro. If you want, you can delete one of them to keep the number of chapters in the book, but I don't see it as a problem that much.

The format and how you write the blurb is a little weird and confusing (For me) The blurb was short. You can make two paragraphs (Minimum one to keep the book great!) so that readers can actually want to read the book after reading the blurb. Because the book is targeted at Indian people, you can make a Hindi version of the blurb because it will keep your book organized. (7/10)

Engagement: The chapters were long and there were no paragraphs. Readers will get easily bored because of it. Seeing the comments, there were lots of readers loving the story! But for maybe some readers, it is confusing and hard to keep up reading the book because of how long each chapter is. You can also show and not tell to make the readers feel the vibe of the story and want to read more of the story.(8/10)

Grammar: There were no huge grammatical errors, except you forgot to

Add an "at the start and end of a dialogue. (Example: "The quick brown fox jumped over the lazy dog" and not like this The quick brown fox jumped over the lazy dog.

This is a small mistake but I saw that you always write n rather than the full word And. This is fine if you want to keep it like that.

(9/15)

Vocabulary: No vocabulary which made readers easy to understand your story but if you want to add uniqueness to your story, you can add some vocabulary in your story to spice things up.(6/10)

Character: The characters were unique and I love how you present them in the story. It was beautiful and I really love the main characters!(10/10)

Writing Style: There were no paragraphs in your story, and I cannot tell which one is the dialogue. There were also lots of emojis because it makes the book look unprofessional but you do you! There were also two languages that were mixed together into one story. It was confusing for readers to read since non-Indians have to google translate it and the same for Indian people who needed to google translate English sentences. (5/10

Cover: The cover was simple and there were no edits, small texts, or even the name of the author on the book cover. (2/5)

Overall: I really love the story but I think you need to improve your writing style and the blurb. Also the cover too! The rest of it is all fine, just some minor mistakes that you need to fix.

Total:75/100