Ohana Reviews

Review- Anonymous Dreams: The dairy of Reincarnation

Reviewer- kinalhariya
Book- Anonymous Dreams: The Diary of Reincarnation
Author- pipiwritesnonsense

The date and time do make it seem like a diary entry. And the starting sentence really works. Because I feel that most diary entries do start like this. I am happy, I am sad, I am frustrated...and in this case I'm in a state of delusion.

The fact the person dreams about some creature and feels familiar, is really intriguing. The confusion and bewilderment comes out naturally.

I would just suggest describing the beautiful creature a little, so we can imagine what the main lead is comparing themselves to.

Last sentence of the first chapter is awesome and leaves a mark.

Small entry, but it left me on edge. It was mysterious and the way it ended created a great hook.

The hybird part one chapter, I was shocked by the turn of events.
However, it took me three tries to understand what was going on. It did clear out when I saw the pattern in other chapters, but I was really confused for some time(totally not your fault, just my confused brain).

I like how instead of hybrid it is hybird.

I love how the feelings of different forms are portrayed. They are all the same yet so different. It is showcased really well.

....Falling asleep, but I know I am just waking up.
This line really struck. It was awesome.

Writing style is unique. I have seen some sentences that are broken down into multiple single worded sentences. It might not be grammatically correct, but it does put an emphasis on what the main lead is feeling.

A bit more of describing and detailing with help form a clear image in mind about what's happening.

Ending was nice and had a great conclusion, but I felt the ending line in Spectre part 4 was more intense. Having said that, I like how the POV turned back to a human giving the story a proper end.

Grammar:

Look out for misplaced and missing commas.

★Human part two
I couldn't wait for any more.

Either it should be- I couldn't wait for any one.
Or

I couldn't wait any more.

★Human part five

A typo. In Front is written as infornt.

Overall, grammar was really necessary as these were the diary entries.

Last words,

This was some really unique and interesting piece. Small entries yet so intriguing. I loved the idea used. Is it possible that this can be converted into a full size novel with the same story outline? Or may be extra parts inside the same story. I think there's potential, but of course that's up to the author.

Anyways, I enjoyed reading it. It was a great experience.

Ps: sorry if there were too many notifications about getting votes continuously on the same chapters(my wattpad was glitching).