Ohana Reviews

Review- The Lightless Star

Reviewer- kinalhariya
Book- The Lightless star (The Lion and his star trilogy)
Author: RosesForDreaming

Blurb:

Love the blurb. It has catched my interest. It is engrossing and also informative. I also loved the conversation which spoke about how the stars loved and comforted her. Just look out for the switching tenses as they break the flow while reading the otherwise interesting blurb.

Moving towards the chapters,

Love how the main character's name- Astra sounds like a star.

Great start. From the very first sentence we can connect with the fact that the main lead dreads the situation she is in.

Like the way the sentences flow. They glide so smoothly. The way of describing the dress without making it look out of the scene was brilliant as well.

I am curious what goes inside the mind of the Star. Having already known that the man was an assassin, she let him lead her outside. She might have a plan or she might be just wishing to die. Anyways, the first chapter started and ended brilliantly. It didn't give away much yet kept me hooked.

The sentence- After all, living through this scenario so many times.....
This really put an emphasis on how many times she was attacked.

I loved the way he described her. Almost felt like a poem.

The interactions, her reactions, her body language, clearly shows how she has been turned into a puppet. It has also increased my interest to know what had happened in the past for this to happen.

As chapters pass by, I like how she and the assassin interact. He has an carefree aura yet seems keen when he observes the slightest change in her mood.

Characters
Characterization is done brilliantly. Like I said before, the body language of the characters really speaks out in the story. The characters, their dilemma's, their annoying traits, everything connects with the readers.

World building
Descriptions of the scenes are well done. We can imagine the whole scene as well as the surroundings while reading the story.

The politics in the story is perfectly shown, but the fantasy part is still a blur. There was a talk about elements and one time she used her power to freeze his hand. Are there any other powers? Does everyone else have some kind of power or is it just the Queen?

Plot
Concept is unique. I feel the pace is a little slow, but it still flows smoothly. The way Astra understands everything yet keeps quiet shows us that it is the trauma from the past. The story keeps making me interested to read further and get to know what has happened and how everything will change.

And not to forget about the assassin pretending to be the prince. I am curious to know who the real prince is and why he sent someone else in his stead. Or whether he is the actual prince himself, but Astra has got it all wrong.

The plot is really intriguing, making me more and more curious with each passing chapter.

Grammar
Fluctuating tenses. The writing keeps fluctuating between present tense and past tense. Selecting one throughout the story would be the best.

Apart from this, the story was grammatically perfect.

Suggestions:

Some paragraphs had space between them, while some didn't. I would suggest selecting a single style for a better presentation.

Last words,

The story is interesting and intriguing. It is also well written. There's just a minor presentation error that puts a break on the overall smooth reading.

Thanks for choosing me. Keep writing!!