Ohana Reviews

Review-Truthless Lies of Hope

Reviewer: doggx_

Book: Truthless Lies of Hope

Author: 0box_cat0

Title: The title is unique and all, but I don't think it matches the book. Since it only has one chapter, the title really doesn't fit the theme. but if you are planning to make more chapters, remember to make the title match the theme or plot of your book. (2/5)

Plot: Don't know much about the plot. And since I don't know the game that much, I am going to give you some extra points for that because you will know much more about Danganropa rather than me. (15/25)

Blurb: blurb really didn't have much context, and it was too short and don't have much information for readers to be interested in your book (4/10)

Engagement: Long paragraphs and dialogues didn't have any spaces or even information at the end of them. A chapter was also long with over 2k words or more (I have an extension to see your word count) (5/10)

Grammar: No mistakes! Great job!(15/15)

Vocabulary: A balanced amount of vocabulary. Great job! (10/10)

Character: The characters rarely have any introductions, only the main character, Furukawa. (6/10)

Writing Style: Paragraphs were thick! you didn't show the readers which character talked

Example

"Hi! Nice to meet you!" and continued the next dialogue "Hey! Nice to meet you too!"

"Hi! Nice to meet you!" Akira smiled, and continued the next dialogue "Hello! Nice to meet you too!" Koda answered back, smiling too.

So, if you want, add a tiny bit of information at each end of the dialogue so the readers will know which character is talking. (5/10)

Cover: The cover was taken from google or other sources. If you want to make it more interesting, you can go to a graphic designer to fix your cover. Or you can create your own cover! And I also noticed that you didn't add your book title to your cover.2/5)

Overall: Maybe improve your writing style and other stuff. The plot was maybe great, but since i don't know much about it.

Total:64/100