The Third Dimension 🐠

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By: Fa1245

Cover: I love the colors and the clock makes me think of Big Ben. (5/5)

Blurb: Great that it's close to your heart, but I have no clue what to expect when reading your blurb being it's really vague. (3/5)

Hook: I love that it starts with a celebration haven't seen that before. (5/5)

Originality: I love that it's in 3rd person and describes the characters around the protagonist. That's different. (10/10)

Character development: Jawad went from a loyal friend to a fake one to a confused young adult in such a short time period I can't keep up. (14/15)

Grammar & Spelling: There were a few missing words here and there. (17/20)

Flow: It seemed to flow pretty well. (20/20)

Enjoyment: It's not really my cup of tea but not the worst story I read so I can see potential readers enjoying themselves. (20/20)

Total: (94/100)

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