The Man in Grey by GoldenMockinjay
Reviewer: kailucy
Title: 4/5
The title is good. It's interesting and easy to remember.
Cover: 3/5
The cover is alright but it isn't the most visually pleasing. The image is fine but the fonts are kinda bland. Maybe make the subtitle a different font. That might help a bit. Sometimes it looks better when there are two fonts that complement each other.
Blurb: 2/5
It caught my attention. I like that there's a certain amount of suspense in the lines.
However, it doesn't really tell much about the story. Maybe if you skipped a few lines and added a bit more about the book. Introduce the MCs and the main plot and stakes.
Plot: 19/20
The plot was interesting. It was decently paced. Since I only read the first five chapters it hasn't really progressed much yet. The last scene in chapter four got me excited to see what would happen next.
Characters: 13/15
The characters were decent but did feel a little flat at times. The MC was decent, she felt well-developed and real. The others it's honestly super early in the book so that may be part of the issue but I had trouble imagining them.
Writing style: 18/20
You have a good writing style. The first chapter was captivating and had a great start. I loved the descriptions of the settings. It really drew me in. I did notice one thing that was slightly distracting and that is that you don't need to put the dialogue in bold. Just mark it with quotation marks.
Grammar/spelling/vocabulary: 19/20
There were a few mistakes I noticed, mostly some missing punctuation. There were a few parts with incorrect grammar.
Engagement: 7/10
It was interesting and I was engaged while reading but I'm not sure if I'd continue. It's just not really my type of book.
Overall: 85/100
Overall, you have a good story. I enjoyed reading it and getting to know the MC. I think writing and plot are your strong points particularly. Just work a bit on the spelling/grammar and maybe try to make the character come to life. Figure out what you want them to be like and then ask yourself: okay how can I make the readers see that without telling them outright? Use dialogue and actions. It will help a lot. Other than that you have a great book!
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