The Finch 🐠

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By: mr_allen_19

Cover: The title kind of blends into all the black and doesn't stand out which draws the attention away from it. (4/5)

Blurb: I have never seen a Blurb written in first person before. (5/5)

Hook: Hook, line, and sinker, makes me want to read more to see why he's crying. (5/5)

Originality: I haven't read anything like it before. Love the fact that you led with action. (10/10)

Character development: It feels like there's not enough there for us to know the characters that well, Das seems to be a boy suffering from depression but what makes him happy? (10/15)

Punctuation was missing, making sentences awkward. Shorthand was used in literature where it shouldn't be. (10/20)

Flow: The setting was kinda awkward and seemed to be multiple scene changes in one part.(15/20)

Enjoyment: Most of the time I was confused, but I liked Kv's note about the noodles. (16/20)

Total: (75/100)

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