By: mr_allen_19
Cover: The title kind of blends into all the black and doesn't stand out which draws the attention away from it. (4/5)
Blurb: I have never seen a Blurb written in first person before. (5/5)
Hook: Hook, line, and sinker, makes me want to read more to see why he's crying. (5/5)
Originality: I haven't read anything like it before. Love the fact that you led with action. (10/10)
Character development: It feels like there's not enough there for us to know the characters that well, Das seems to be a boy suffering from depression but what makes him happy? (10/15)
Punctuation was missing, making sentences awkward. Shorthand was used in literature where it shouldn't be. (10/20)
Flow: The setting was kinda awkward and seemed to be multiple scene changes in one part.(15/20)
Enjoyment: Most of the time I was confused, but I liked Kv's note about the noodles. (16/20)
Total: (75/100)
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