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Review- A Fallen Homekin

Reviewer- kinalhariya
Book- A fallen Homekin
Author- ToWolfKin

Blurb:

Blurb is very interesting and it is well-written too. We get to know about the main lead and what the story is about while still being curious about various factors. I am really intrigued to see the new world and Fralith deals with it. I am also eager to see what he did to stop the kidnapping.

Prologue:
Great start. The descriptions and analogies used make up for a great imagery. The time when he concluded that it wasn't home was really impactful.

Prologue was beautifully written and it was very intriguing.

There's just one suggestion from me- To know what is different from Fralith's original world, we need to know the original first. The ending sentence was a great hook, but if I had known what SecondHome was, it would have been much more impactful.

However, this is just a prologue so I would suggest just one or two lines about his original world and not the entire information.

Moving towards the chapters,

Great descriptions.

MetalEater seems interesting and also Fralith's confusion around it. I am assuming that it is something that was greatly feared in his world and here no one cares about it. Probably the new world is more advanced and knows the solution to not get hurt by it. However, I don't know what it really is.

It is realistic that he is frazzled by the new world. Also the fact that the change in food takes most of his concern right now. Given his age, this seems like the most appropriate concern after fear for life.
Ps: the names for the food were quite unique😁.

So the SecondHome, although familiar, wasn't his real home either. I am really intrigued to find out everything.

I have never seen such a description for pain. It was unique and was portrayed really well.

The Beginning of the second chapter is intriguing. The ocean, the waves, the beep(probably a machine in hospital) and the wind trying to say something. It is an interesting setting. I really love the comparisons made in this story.

Not knowing what is happening and what kind of danger he is in. Having also lost his only weapon, the panic he would be in is shown so well.

I know he was scared but the line- (you knife stealing person) somehow sounded so cute.

I loved the fact that even if he didn't understand the words, he could feel the soothing tone in her words.

His body language, his thoughts, everything connects so deeply. I was on the verge of crying as he cried internally for his home.

FlameHair, Fralith really comes up with unique names for things. His imagination about the bed was so cute. The bedbeast😂😂. Now this makes me wonder whether the MetalEater was probably a car.

Simple logic: Good food= Good person. I loved his interaction with FlameHair. The way they worked through the communication barrier was really beautiful.

I don't know why it took me so long to understand but the world Fralith was from is a new fictional world but the world he has arrived to, is the one where we live in😅😅.

From Fralith's reaction, it seems that he was abused in the past and that too from a family member.

Fralith remembering his elder brother was both heartwarming and heartbreaking.

The way he tried the food, his thoughts about it and the last comment- silly disgusting imposters- it was all so enjoyable to read. It was so cute and funny.

I can't even count the times I have gone 'aww' while reading the story.

Fralith got so scared. It is understandable as he doesn't understand FlameHair's language. The way he tried to not make FlameHair angry was so heartbreaking.

Learning each other's language😁. I am as excited as they both are.

Fralith comparing his brother's hugs with Tim was so heartwarming. He found someone he could trust in the new world. The last line of the chapter really touched my heart.

*****
One of the best characterizations I have seen. His feelings really connect to the heart. And the way they deal with the communication barriers. I am in love with the characters.

World building is done brilliantly. The things that confused me slowly started becoming more and more understandable as time passed by. Nothing was spelled out for the readers, things just started making sense. I love the unique names given for everything.

Concept is very interesting and the way it is presented adds up to the enjoyment. Story flows at a steady pace.

I am in love with your writing style. There isn't a single dull moment in the story. I just wanted to keep reading the story.

Grammar:

There weren't really any grammatical errors I could find. (But I can't be too sure. I was too immersed in the story, sorry about that)

Chapter 4

There had been an lift at the end of his words...

→There had been a lift at the end of his words...

Last words,

I absolutely loved the story. The storyline, characters, emotional moments, cuteness; everything was just awesome. I had a great time reading the story. I would be definitely adding this book to my library to read the entire book later.