Ohana Reviews

Review- Royal Deception

Reviewer- kinalhariya
Book- Royal Deception
Author- tannyprecious

Blurb:

Blurb is written in a simple style, yet it is exciting. We get to know what the story is about and what's going to happen. I am really curious to find out if the crown prince was actually the culprit or someone deceived them. I am keen to see Jungmyung try and help him while being married to someone else. It looks like an interesting and amazing plot from the blurb.

Prologue:

Nice prologue. It showed the bond the Late King had with everyone. It also portrayed the positions and the reason behind it in a simple way, which might be helpful when the real story starts. However, I noticed that the King and his younger brother had the same name Yi Yun. Is it a typo? Or is it done purposefully?

Moving towards the chapters,

A fun start. The laziness and it disappearing the moment she realizes that her mother would be teaching her, was hilarious to read. It seemed realistic too. It would be harder for regular teachers to keep the royal children in check.

Her mother's worry was well portrayed. I loved the back and forth between them.

Jungmyung's personality instantly connected within the first chapter. Although lazy, she is a smart cookie. She seems like a fun person.

First chapter was interesting. However, too many details and information were provided in the second half of the chapter at once. It would be better if it was shown slowly or through some dialogues instead of a monologue.

Poor Jungmyung has to learn everything she hates😂😂. It is fun to see her cribbing.
The only person who can argue with her father/prime minister. It is fun, cute and realistic at the same time. Her bond with her family is beautiful.

Becoming the prince's strength and not his weakness- I liked this part. I also liked how determined Jungmyung turned in an instant after knowing about the dangers.

They three really seem like friends, not only in words but also in action. I enjoyed their first entry into the story.

Yi sun figured out something was amiss. If only they had heard his suspicions then. Great foreshadowing.

I would suggest changing the way of showcasing the details about the princesses. The extra details break the flow.

Forgetting the fact that her brother is a General commander and worrying about him, it was cute.

The shock Jungmyung felt after seeing that man dying was well portrayed. It felt genuine.

Her brother was right about Jungmyung needing to get out of the bubble she was confined in. However, Jungmyung having this realization instantly felt a little off. I would suggest dragging it a little by showing her confusion on this topic and him explaining his point of view, rather than her directly agreeing with him. Understanding things after seeing the slums (next chapter) would be a better idea in my opinion. I feel the situation would have more impact this way.

I love that her brother and Yi Sun both are eager and happy to help out with her plan for her birthday. Excited to see what she has planned.

Jungmyung's smartness showed as she came up with the plan of having noble women contribute to the charity event.

Her first rule was hilarious. The short fight between Jungmyung and Yi Sun was cute and fun. Loved the bond between them.

****

Characterization of the main leads is done perfectly. We can see through their personality and they connect well. Supporting characters are good too. However, author can work on their introductions.

World building is done nicely. We are able to imagine everything clearly. The differences needed for the historical genre shows through clearly. However, I would suggest toning down the descriptions of dresses. Too many descriptions can break the flow while reading.

Concept seems interesting. Story flows at a slow but steady pace. Main plotline hasn't started yet, but the base of the story is perfect. So I can definitely assume the further story to be amazing as well.

Writing style is good but has the potential to improve. There are many facts and dialogues that are wonderful. However, they need a better surrounding action/dialogue to reach their full impact.

Grammar:

Look out for minor typos, and continuous fluctuating tenses. Other than that, the story was well written.

Last words,

Interesting story. I liked the characters and the concept. The story seems to be going well until now without any hitches. Characters are fun to read, their bond is unique with no over-the-top actions, there's some mystery brewing too. I enjoyed reading this story and will definitely add the story to my library to read it later.

(I read a few extra chapters as it was said that  it might be needed to understand the plot. However, it seems that it will need more than a few chapters to reach the main storyline. I will be definitely reading the entire story later on, but I wouldn't be able to provide a review for it, sorry.)