Ohana Reviews

Review- Blue and Green Roses

Reviewer- kinalhariya
Book- Blue and Green Roses
Author- G1ng3r_Biscuits

Blurb:
Blurb is short yet effective. It is unique, sort of like the distinguish between answers we did in school. We get to know the two characters here itself, along with finding out the concept of the story. Blurb was well-written. It made me eager to read the story.

Moving towards the chapters,

The fine detailing in the starting paragraph, changes a usual description into a fantastic one. Great work done here.

Clay's denial and the way he tries to convince himself is portrayed really well.

The small comparison of his bed with his girlfriend spoke volumes about what he felt.

George's situation is exactly opposite to Clay. Losing friends must have been tough, but he seems to be taking it in stride. I felt so relieved to find that at least he had one friend, someone who probably lost as much as him if not more.

Nice cliffhanger for both the characters. Excited to see what happens next.

The way Clay compared George to the beauty of roses was just heartwarming. Their nervous and awkward gestures were just so cute.

Sharing secrets with a stranger is a cool thing until they come face to face in their daily life. I am on the edge of the couch imagining that scene.

Clay was oblivious but George wasn't. I guess they weren't exactly strangers then. Plot is getting more and more interesting.

I liked the idea of a blue stranger and a green stranger.

Madison seems annoying. But it might be also because Clay has no real interest in her and is just stringing her along.

I can't believe they did that to George. I am both angry and heartbroken at this.

The paragraph where Clay's friends inform him about the prank can be written in a slightly different way to create more impact. Some smirks, some exaggeration, boo-hoo's would show their cruel prank in entirety.

Clay feeling betrayed felt relatable and realistic, and so was George's need to hide his identity.

Clay and Madison are too toxic for each other. It is shown really well.

I am glad that Clay is trying to understand George's action amidst of his own confusions.

I am curious as to why Clay's parents needed to tell him about the windows, especially his windows. Did he not notice it when he went to his room? The part would have made sense if the windows broken were of some other room and Clay wasn't home at that time.

The part where George told Clay that Clay didn't want to be normal, he just wanted to pretend to be. And George refused to play pretend- it was really awesome. It was Well-written and it connected straight to the heart.

Poor Clay😂😂. He worked on the bus schedule for the whole day, and all his work was destroyed in the last five minutes of the school.

George told him to wait in silence yet he was the first one to talk😂😂.

Clay's and George's chemistry is just so natural.

George's parents are so fun and awesome. Although they had a small screen space, they made their mark into the hearts of readers.

Chapter 8 was the shortest, but it left such an impact. The greatest cliffhanger of all times. Something big happened, and I am dying to know that.

Congratulations on breaking my heart. If the characters manage to pull out the emotions of readers, then it is obvious how awesome that story and writing is. Great work done.

****

As said in the above paragraph, characters connect really well. Without any extra descriptions, telling, or extraordinary actions, they have made their place in our hearts by just being them. The confusion, denial, mistakes, heartbreak; everything is portrayed really well.

World building is minimum. I don't really mind as long as I get the grasp of the story. Here, the characters and emotions are impactful enough for me to ignore all the detailings. But it might not be enough for all readers. So you can work on the descriptions a little. Having said that, the descriptions of panic and fear were showcased well.

Writing style is simple and enjoyable. Words and dialogues flow like a breeze. Story moves at a steady pace. There aren't any filler chapters, each and every moment is dedicated to the character's development.

Concept is interesting. It might be a completely unique concept but it sure enough manages to grab attention. Story is written really well. It was hard to put down the book even for writing the review.

Grammar:

★Tenses keep fluctuating.

★Typos

★Missing commas

★Some letters needed to be capitalized, especially after the end of dialogues.

These are some minute errors in the story that can be easily weeded out while editing.

Suggestion:

At some places, I had to read twice or thrice to understand which dialogue was spoken by whom. Especially in the starting chapters where we aren't well versed with the characters. I would suggest clarifying it a bit.

Last words,

A cute, simple and lovely story. There were many 'awe' moments in the story as well as the heartbreaking ones.

It isn't the most perfectly written story but it would definitely be loved by most readers. Story has great potential

I thoroughly enjoyed reading the story. I will be definitely adding it to my library.

Thank you for choosing me. Keep writing!