Ohana Reviews

Review- Lucifer's Garden

Reviewer- kinalhariya
Book- Lucifer's Garden
Author- durehland

Blurb:
I like the starting quote. It sets the tone of the story. Lucifer's need to keep the tradition and Adam's righteousness; the difference is enough to hook the readers in. The way their situation changes is also interesting. I am eager to read the story after reading this blurb.

Overall, blurb is well written, but there are two things I would like to suggest:

★Unlike anyone that Lucifer usually interacts with....
This sentence & the next sentence ↓
He is nothing like Lucifer has ever had to deal with.
These both sentences give out the same information, so there's no need for two.

★Space between paragraphs will make the blurb more eye-pleasing.

Moving towards the chapters,

The effect given at the start is great. Alone and peace- these words really give out the impact without any further explanation.

I liked the imagery that was provided about where he was seated and how it made him look to others.

Descriptions and detailing about Fedriel's state were perfect too.

Being wronged after doing all sorts of wrongs for the party. It is interesting to see something different than just being right or wrong. This adds up a unique touch.

The way Fedriel who was about to give in saw his lie, it was awesome enough to get goosebumps.

The dynamics between them kept changing so suddenly yet so smoothly.

There were so many twists in the first chapter itself. Way to keep a reader hooked.

I would suggest keeping the descriptions about the surroundings short. The readers may just skim over it.

Adam's speech was perfect to make us spellbound if we were the citizens. A nice way to show his standing among everyone and also the viewpoints he is promoting.

Evelyn seems like an intriguing character.
Her want to go back to her working habits seemed realistic and cute.

It is not told but from their actions I would assume that she is an employee turned into a partner.

My guess came true within a few paragraphs😁. However, I don't know how long it would last because Adam and Lucifer are the main leads.

Lucifer's remark struck close. It was something that had come to my mind when Adam had mentioned her agreeing to doing nothing when she accepted his proposal. It was amusing to me when this came up.

Awesome line:
If he's here, then that means there's either something to fix or he's here to break something he can fix.

Biggest babysitter- hilarious name if you consider Lucifer's attitude.

Lucifer's miscalculation about Adam and the events that baffled Lucifer were a sight to see, especially to see how much effort he put to find one loophole.

Thoroughly enjoyed the interaction between Lucifer and Adam. Both with their attitude and defiance were interesting to read. Although Lucifer did end up winning with his dirty tricks, Adam's courage to say no on Lucifer's face was so worth it.

It would be best to not get into Sherimiah's bad books. She looks like a fascinating character.

Just how far Lucifer could go for things to work in his way was clearly shown through his actions.

Adam's pain and helplessness were portrayed so well.

I wonder how many times Lucifer did such work that he exactly knew what was going to happen next.

Once down the spiral, Adam keeps going down. I had been expecting him to not give in too soon, but he is human after all.

Taking Lucifer's help for something Lucifer did to him. For someone who knew Lucifer was here to break things he could fix, Adam shouldn't have fallen into his trap. But he was so absorbed in his sin that all the smartness seems to have vanished.

Every other thing seems realistic except one fact- how did Adam let go of that assault so easily? Even if he can't outrightly get him punished, because of his own reputation; he must harbor some kind of hatred, a feeling of revenge, or a pained emotion for what happened to him. (But it got clear in the end)

Lucifer's next decision seems more scary than his plan of ruining Adam, and that says a lot.

Adam's condition and reactions feels so realistic and agonizing.

These are only characters, yet relief coursed through my veins when Adam finally realized what had actually happened. Evelyn came as a savior to him.

Adam really threw the bomb in the eighth chapter. It was probably the only way to get out of Lucifer's clutches and save his conscience.

*****

Amazing characterization. Seriously, this was one of the best characterizations I have seen. Their actions spoke volumes. No words, no descriptions, nothing was needed. It felt like they were real people. The evil, the good, the fleeting conscience, everything was so well portrayed.

World building is done nicely. We get to know about the world of elections a bit and more of what goes behind. Descriptions and detailing were so nicely portrayed that we could imagine the scenes vividly.

Writing style was fantastic. I think it would be hard for me to pen down how gripping everything was. The extent of manipulation written so realistically. It was hard to put down the book once we went past the first half of the chapter. The twists, the actions, the reactions, enjoyed them all.

Concept was unique and it was also presented so well. Story moved at a steady pace. Chapter moved smoothly, always keeping us on edge to see how things would turn out.

Grammar:

Too many commas where they aren't needed.

I have pointed out the minor mistakes I found while reading below:

Chapter 2

★Go back and make nice.

Not too sure about this sentence. Maybe- Go back and be nice. Or Go back and make it nice.

Chapter 6

★That was always people's fancy way of wanting to offer money they knew not to be offer.

→....offer money they knew not to be offered.

Typos in Chapter 7
★ Depending on the scenes, I feel it must have been Lucifer rather than Adam.

↓↓↓
→Adam pulled out the flash drive.

→Do you think that was your only sin? Adam asked.

→Adam stood and watched in pride as Adam went after him.

→so Adam stood over both of them, watching Adam cry and mourn a friend...

★The name of Chetachi is written as Chatachi.

Chapter 8
Missing quotation marks in one place.

Apart from these minor errors, the book was grammatically well-written.

Last words,

Interesting would be a very small word to describe this book. The book was so well written. It was a thrilling experience to read it. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this book. The review is for eight chapters, but I am definitely completing the whole book.

Thank you for choosing me. Keep writing!