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Review- Creatures in Depth

Reviewer- kinalhariya
Book- Creatures in Depth
Author- june_berrin

Blurb:

Blurb is awesome. It gives us a clear gist of what the story is about. The concept seems unique and new. It is well written too. The last sentence creates a great hook.

Just check out for this sentence in the second last para:
But time is ticking, and within her, Cerelia fearful truth: one that could ruin everything.
→Here, the words 'Cerelia fearful truth' seems incomplete to me.

Moving towards the story,

Great start. It matches the theme, readers concluded from the blurb.

Descriptions are written beautifully. It is also in perfect balance. I can imagine everything vividly. There's a perfect balance of phrases, metaphors, and regular writing.

The tunes of sirens and their effect is portrayed well.

Controlling the temptation must be so hard. And to also maintain a dazed expression while fighting it inside. I can't imagine the self control it would have needed.

The creature's physical description as well as its tactics were shown brilliantly.

The slight exchange between Cerelia and Jasper had me chuckling. I can guess why Cerelia was more immune to the siren, but it does bring a tinge of wonder. Good foreshadowing here.

Damn! I didn't think a character would die in the first chapter itself. I really thought she would be saved.

Interesting first chapter. It kept me hooked throughout.

Cerelia reacted differently to the emotional situation. And she was aware about it too. It was portrayed well.

Collecting blood for a memorial statue. I wonder if it is a cultural thing? Or something made up for the story.

The backstory of how she became a fallen was interesting.

About her being a ticking bomb, I liked that sentence. It gives out a great effect while simultaneously building curiosity about her.

The threat of making someone bald...that really works. The scene of how she found out Alec's secret was described well. Her tension, over-thinking, and her disheveled state after breaking the door in panic, is portrayed nicely.

Sophia's body appearing in water was an awesome twist. It has me on the edge, eager to find out what is happening.

These illusions always get me. The way they cannot control their body moments, start seeing their loved ones, their struggle to get out of it; everything is shown so well. It also shows the power of the siren because they fall into the illusion even after knowing all about it.

Damn! The way Cerelia envisioned April and suddenly got slapped😂😂. A hilarious scene amidst the tension.

Everlee, April, Daine, they all have such different personalities. But together they seem like a great team. It was a sweet moment between all of them.

They put so much efforts into killing those sirens. If they come back again, then all the efforts would be in vain. Great twist.

The danger seems to have reached the next level.

****

Characterization is done nicely. Main lead's personality comes through nicely while still maintaining a mysterious vibe. Supporting characters are also described well. Even though there are so many, we can still distinguish them. Their different personalities are portrayed well.

Love the writing style. The words really captivate you. Writing is not too tough. But the comparisons, the way her thoughts are described, it captures your attention while still making it easy to read.

World building is done nicely. We get to know about the place-the ruins and the beautiful past, how the government handles the situation, the current position of the main lead and their significance in this new world. The new world is easy to imagine. It is described really well.

Concept is unique and interesting. Story moves at a steady pace. There isn't any hitch or plot hole. The words flow smoothly.

Grammar
Tenses keep fluctuating between past tense and present tense. I would suggest to select and keep one style throughout.

Punctuations were missing here and there.

Apart from these minute errors, the story is grammatically well-written.

Over all,

Absolutely amazing story. There wasn't a single moment where I felt bored. Characters, descriptions, emotions, action, world building, dialogues; everything is awesome.

I thoroughly enjoyed reading the story.

Thanks for choosing me. Keep writing!!