Ohana Reviews

Review- World's Fate

Reviewer- kinalhariya
Book- World's Fate
Author- Denyefa4

Blurb:

Blurb has gained my attention. I wanted to read the story right away.

Blurb lets us know about the characters personality traits along with the two major plots they are going to deal with. Everything is explained in a simple way. So that reader's know what they are getting into.

I might get a little biased here: one- because I love kind hearted male leads, two- I love when people with two different personalities come together to fight a common enemy. I have high expectations. Let's see what happens.

Moving towards the story,

Awesome start with an awesome comparison😂.

Surroundings and how learning worked(a little bit) 2was shown nicely as she walked up to her destination.

I loved the small moments between her and her mom. It was cute as well as emotional.

Nice way of showing her background history. I also liked the way he advised her about not showing weakness and everything that followed after.

I enjoyed the chapter, but I think it could have ended up with a better hook.

Martha is quite a character😂. The way she pointed out her own faults like it was a regular thing. But the way she answered back to the desk lady...I had a great time chuckling. Amazing characterization.

I feel like the room's description should have come when she entered the room and not while she was leaving. Or you can skip the description altogether. It somehow felt weird to read the description later on. 

A white wolf...that was sudden. When did he shift? Or was he in the wolf form from the start?

The way the mates usually accept each other seemed unique. And I second Cathy's thoughts. No need to accept at first glance itself.

I loved how he silently helped her. The little exchange, more like banter between them, was cute.

Cathy's sarcastic remarks are fun to read. She is a mix of badass and fragile. Definitely an interesting character to read.

The subtle helpful actions of Nath and the smiles at Cathy's reactions, overall makes him a lovable character.

Her wolf's entry was awesome. The way Cathy got scared of the voice at first, it made it seem so real.

"Okay, I am dead." This line was really funny as this pretended to be dead before her own wolf. Cathy's actions are so cute and hilarious.

Her wolf sounds knowledgeable and mature. Probably because she was someone else's wolf too. Nice Characterization for the wolf too. She connected instantly.

It seems the exact other way round with Nath and his wolf. Nath sounds more mature and someone who thinks with his mind while Xavier follows his heart. Probably because his mate is concerned. Their assassination talks were fun to read. And it also showed the protectiveness they felt for their mate.

I really felt bad for Nath. Poor guy was trying so hard for a conversation, while the other just came and swept his girl away. Though, I quite enjoyed the bickering between Xavier and Nath.

Alex's long comeback was just awesome. His confidence was something else. It was hilarious when he said that Cathy was supposed to be scared that Alex would steal Nath away.

The prophecy was described really well. Shifter's with powers were a unique trait. 

Nath is a kind person but his power is dark. It resonates with the rest of his family though. Cathy's power is quite unique. Never heard of that one in any fantasy book.

It is fascinating that the solution to the world problem is them being together as mates. It is even more interesting because Cathy despises that very idea.

I like how Cathy and Nath are finally discussing their actual feelings. I enjoyed their banter too. But this was necessary too.

Just one thing- at first Nath says he didn't want to show his vulnerable self to her and two paragraphs later it said he wasn't afraid to  show his vulnerable side. They both are contradictory and not much has happened in just two paragraphs for such a big change. 

I loved how Nath stopped, trying to respect Cathy's emotions even though he had the chance to go ahead.

And she was back to her usual self😁.

*****

Characterization is done perfectly. They all have made their places. Their personalities connect well and I love watching them interact with each other. Just one thing, side characters seemed to be disappearing soon. Make sure to bring them in from time to time.

World building is done nicely. We are introduced to the world by the dialogues. It is easy to understand, both the shifter's world and the prophecy. Things are explained simply without breaking the otherwise flow of the story.

Concept is interesting. Chapters move by smoothly. However, hook points and cliffhangers can be worked upon. They can gain more attention from the readers and create curiosity.

Writing style is decent. Words move smoothly. Information is given at appropriate levels. 

Grammar:

Look out for punctuation errors, mostly commas.

I have pointed out some minor errors I found in chapters.

Chapter 2

Instead of courtesy, cutesy is used.

Chapter 4

Instead of believe, belief is used.

Chapter 5

Suddenly all the dialogues turned italics midway. Whether it was Cathy speaking or her wolf. This might create confusion.

Chapter 8

A typo here

...as he directed his anger at Nath.

→...as he directed his anger at Alex.

Other than this, the story was grammatically well-written.

Last words,

I enjoyed reading the story. Loved the characters and their banters. The wolves also made a special place in my heart, despite the small screen time. Story is well-written and thoroughly enjoyable.

Thanks for choosing me. Keep writing!