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꧁༺Review ~ The Chronicles of Annora

Title: The Chronicles of Annora

Author: @Book_Fangirl_13 

Reviewer: AleksanderKirigan

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Writing Style 9/10:

You have a very... um... "smooth" writing style. Like, I don't know how to explain it! The way you write helps clear the flow and makes the reader able to understand and enjoy your work. :)

Flow 4/5:

It's easy to digest, mainly due to your writing style. Maybe don't add scenery before each and every chapter, as it sort of interrupts the reading flow. Try and write out the scenery, as that is what makes reading fun. :)

Vocabulary 8/10:

You have a wide range of vocabulary, which is needed to write a good story. But I suggest widening it even more, especially with descriptions of characters, as normal colours can get a little boring after a while.

Engagement 10/10:

Now that is what I call a story that starts off with a bang! I love your prologue. It gives a nice front page as to what to expect in the story. You can make the reader audibly gasp, which is crucial in a good story prologue. Your story continuously has cliff-hangers, and surprises in each and every chapter, making the reader want to keep going back for more. Good work. :)

Cover 5/5:

I want to give a big kudos to your cover maker @-AshTree- cause the cover's SLAY.

Title 5/5:

SOLELY MY OPINION

I like the name cause it reminds me of The Chronicles of Narnia-

heh

Ok that aside, the title is very good. Have you tried giving individual names to books if it's going to be a series?

Plot 22/25:

You had asked specifically for plot. I'd say it's very engaging, especially since you had a war scene just packed right at the start. But I thought that the entire marriage thing between the prince and Aletheia was a bit too rushed, and not focused on. Maybe try and include her protesting against the marriage a little more, as it seems like she has just accepted it wholly. Ok, maybe not "protest" as you clearly said that bad things would happen to her family, but maybe battle alongside inner feelings. :)

Character/Character development 16/20:

Here's where I had a little problem. Sorry if I sound a little harsh. The way you explain the descriptions of the characters is very bland and textbook. Most books will have the author revealing a little about the looks of a character as they go along in a chapter. Try that method, instead of revealing everything all at once. Other than that, your characters are very nice, and I like their intriguing names. :)

Description/Blurb 3/5:

Your blurb is very, very long! Most Wattpad readers won't stall to read all that. Try and shorten it. I have mentioned the character description above. With the setting, describe it verbally, instead of adding pictures, as it gets a little boring for the reader to imagine with the scenery already there. Though, I noticed that you had gotten rid of it through to the later chapters. :)

Basic Grammar 5/5:

Your grammar is very good. You have all the needed punctuation added. Well done. :)

TOTAL: 87/100

Hope you find my review helpful :)