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꧁༺Review - Akshaya Keerthi ~~ The rise of Rajat Kūmārī

Title: Akshaya Keerthi ~~ The rise of Rajat Kūmārī

Author: @me_idnsd

Reviewer: AleksanderKirigan

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Writing Style 10/10:

I absolutely love it! It gives off a very mysterious sense, especially in the first chapter. :)

Flow 4/5:

The story is very easy to follow along! Maybe a little too many images in the first chapter, but that is entirely up to you if you want to keep them. I shall talk about the characters in the character section. :)

Vocabulary 10/10:

You have a wide range of describing language and other vocab in your story. I like it a lot, seeing as I have read many stories with repetitive words. Keep it up! :)

Engagement 9/10:

Overall, the story is a must-read, seeing as it expresses the Hindu culture so much, and that makes me very happy! The aesthetics you provided for the characters is very much enjoyable and helpful to look at. I love how you showed each of the graphics made, as well as some awards that you have received for this particular book. And the dedications at the start just warmed my heart. :)

Cover 5/5:

What can I say lol? I love peacock feathers! It is also very mystical and ties in well with the story. :)

Title 5/5:

I can't really evaluate, as it's just a title, but if I were to have just stumbled upon the story, I would definitely read it. :)

Plot 23/25:

You plot is very intricate, and I like it. For some people, the Sanskrit terms could be a little challenging, but I like how you kept the translations next to them. I don't really have much feedback for this particular section. :)

Character/ Character development 16/20:

Your main characters are very nicely thought out, I have no problems with them. To be honest, I am already in love with Anandhàni. You had requested specifically that I review the number of characters. And yes, there are quite a lot. Maybe a little too much. While reading, I find it a little hard to keep up with the characters. Maybe don't state them all in your "characters" section, and just tell a little about them when they come up in a chapter. But yes, there are many characters and I felt myself constantly going back to check who was who. Other than that, no problem. :)

Description/Blurb 4/5:

The description is very long, and I don't think most people will be interested enough to read the entire thing. Maybe shorten it and remove the "Forwarding his hands towards..." etc. as you already have an entire chapter dedicated to that. :)

Basic grammar 3/5:

There are a few comma mistakes and the sort, which tie in with flow. Try to keep names starting with capital letters, especially names of deities and chants, as it is pretty disrespectful to not be formatting their names like that.

TOTAL (if my math isn't wrong lol): 89/100

Overall, mujhe aapki kahani bahut acha laga!

lol I'm so sorry, I'm not used to typing in Hindi XD

Hope you found my review helpful <3