Ohana Reviews

Review- Roses and Violets

Reviewer- kinalhariya
Book- Roses and Violets
Author- Hershey_297

Prologue:

Great start. Julie's emotions are portrayed really well. And even the other person's too. Although who that person is, is unclear in the start, they still manage to show the cruelty and the sadist nature. 

The poem left quite an impact. The agony she felt when those words were uttered, reached out to the readers. Ending line of the poem really gave out an effect.

Prologue is written very well. And it ends with quite a hook. Good job done here.

First chapter:

Love the start. Instead of boring long paragraphs and descriptions, it starts with a scene that makes us get a glimpse of both the main characters and raises our expectations to know about them later.

I think it was a great idea to put that little scene before the descriptions could start. Personally, I get bored if the description starts early on in the story.

Descriptions are apt. Not too much to get boring but enough to let us understand the surroundings and where they are while talking. I am not exactly sure but I think this fine detailing was missing in the earlier version.

Give it to your friend to hand it to you honestly😂😂. I thoroughly enjoyed how Grayson shut Seb down and didn't bother to coddle him.

Julie-Alan-Grayson's scene was humorous too. 

Throwing a ball on a person to shut them up. A great way to end an argument...not😂😂.

Last line gave a proper end to the starting chapter.

First chapter is written well. It was enjoyable to say the least. We got to know about the characters. Despite being so many, they all made their place. Their personalities came across really well. As said above, descriptions are written beautifully. Story is grammatically well written too. 

Descriptions, dialogues, actions, everything was executed well. The start and the end are in proper sync. 

Overall, I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. It was perfect in my eyes.

Thank you for choosing me. Keep writing!