Ohana Reviews

Review- Oreo Ice cream

Reviewer- kinalhariya
Book- Oreo Ice cream
Author- LeavesAreYellow

My mouth is watering by seeing the title and the cover😁.

Coming back to the story,

The paragraph states that she needed a book to cast evil strangers(friends) and to avoid everyone and just remain a bookworm- this really connects well. It shows off what the main lead is feeling and it is also relatable.

First chapter starts off really well. It has raised my curiosity as to what she had heard. And even without knowing the reason, the main lead's feeling and anxiety can be felt all the way through here.

Noodles mixed with bitter uncomfort and sour fear- awesome line👏🏻👏🏻

Friendship is important but she seemed too possessive at first. But seeing what happened in the next chapter, I understood the reason behind her fear of losing the friendship.

Saying Josie instead of Flora wasn't misspelling. Misspelling would have been if he had her own name wrong like Flara or something. Another term would be better to use here.

I like how Flora's confusion is portrayed even while she is helping Josie. Many times, our mind is in two thoughts, so this seemed really relatable.

I read about the butterfly twice. It seems to have a significant meaning.

Most of the chapters end with a great hook. 

I love the awkwardness yet the care present. I am also curious about the misunderstanding that led them to not talk for a year.

Cole's and Flora's friendship was really cute. Loved the nickname too.

Flora's mom seemed angry when she thought that Tristan texted, and flora too was hiding it like her mom finding out would cause havoc. But then her Mom asked her to be a good friend to him. This threw me off. I couldn't understand what happened.

****

Characterization is done brilliantly. There's confusion, there's awkwardness, there's hope, there's care; everything is portrayed beautifully. The character's personalities are refreshing to read and it comes across really well. 

Descriptions are minimal but enough to imagine the scenes.

Plot is simple yet the way it is portrayed makes it interesting. There are some minor areas where I felt confused, but overall the plot is presented well.

Writing style is also good. Things are understandable. There are a few mysteries that keep us hooked while the plot progresses.

Story flows at a steady pace. The Dialogues are good. Flora's inner monologues are interesting too.

Blurb

Some work needs to be done on blurb. I wasn't really pulled to read the story after reading it. And there wasn't enough information either. 

Grammar:

Chapter three

★Coming near Josie, I whispered to him

Either it is whispered to her or you could write Tristan to avoid confusion if you were talking about him. 

Chapter five

★So you read in the same class as he does, don't you?

Read in the same class feels a little weird. 

After reading the next line it seems the teacher wasn't talking about being in the same class like I presumed. Can you clarify what that sentence meant?

Chapter 7

At one conversation as Lee grabbed her forearm, I thought the conversation was between them, but it turned out to be between Cole and Flora(about an English book). I would like it if it could be clarified a little.

Apart from this, I think the story was grammatically well-written.

Last words,

Story is interesting. More than plot driven, this is a character driven story. And that part has been excelled by the author. Characters are relatable. They don't seem to move in one direction, their mind is all over just like real teenagers. The importance of friendship in that age and the lengths teenagers go through for it was showcased beautifully. 

There are some improvements needed, but I enjoyed the story.