Ohana Reviews

Review- Hunter's Prey

Reviewer- kinalhariya
Book- Hunter's Prey
Author- ElleJrdn

Blurb:

The blurb definitely raises eyebrows and sends off an eerie feeling. A feeling that something is about to go wrong.

What is written is good, but it doesn't really tell us anything about the story or the characters we will be reading about. I would suggest putting a symbol or any kind of scene break after these lines, and then provide a short description about what the story is about.

Moving towards the chapters,

Nice start. Descriptions are simple yet effective. I can visualize the entire scene. The last line in the first paragraph- (She is being chased) isn't really needed as the above description shows it directly to the readers.

The bond between the two was shown beautifully. His hard work getting paid off by her smile was a cute moment.

The mystery rises when she wonders who is chasing her. That part showed two things, one- she hadn't seen the perpetrator. Two- she knows that forest like the back of her hands.

I like the facts and emotions shown. However, I feel that sentences don't flow that smoothly. Compound and complex sentences might work better instead of simple ones for the story. Same sentences just with a little tweak would make them easier to flow. But I do have to say, the language used was awesome. Some words also felt like I was reading something from a royal/ historic background.

The description of the hunter was well done. It was easy to imagine him. And the way they interacted was portrayed really well. A great first chapter. It was beautiful and made me interested to read further.

Story started getting more and more interesting and intriguing with the cage and ruins.

His strange behaviour, her confusion, the panic, everything has been well portrayed.

I have some guesses like he followed her because the bracelet was made out of the stones that came from ruins. And something along the lines as soulmates(this guess was purely because they both felt something when they were near). I would love to see how the story actually turns out.

First the cage and then the different bedrooms, I would love to see what the male lead is thinking during all this time too.

I am also eager to see how the communication barrier gets dissolved and what happens to the one she has been promised to.

And my questions got answered in the next chapter itself😁. The technology in the middle of the forest seems intriguing.

The way she ordered the lights to switch on, showed the power that ran through her because of the anger. Anger does make you fearless. And it was shown really well.

The place he lived surely turned out to be unpredictable. A great twist indeed.

Their names really matched their personalities. And I was so engrossed into the story that I didn't even realize that we didn't know the names of the main leads until now.

I had thought that the translator helped the hunter know her language. But it was the other way round. That was cool.

The scene was small, yet I also got scared for Fae. The fear was portrayed well.
I am glad that hunter stopped in time. However, I feel that it might not be enough to reduce her fear.

A small query- Are his eyes the main cause of attraction? Like some kind of manipulation? Or that attraction is natural?

Her panic for sitting on a spacecraft for the first time is relatable. However, I am surprised that her first thought wasn't going home upon seeing it.

*****
Characters are well formed. The emotions get across really well, making us feel for the main lead too. Conversations flow smoothly and body language too is portrayed well. Both verbally and non-verbally the characters connect with the readers really well

World building is done nicely too. Detailing and descriptions are at a proper balance. It is easy to visualize the places and rooms, without it becoming too overbearing to read.

Concept is amazing and it is written well too. There aren't any plot holes. Story keeps you engaged. And the chapters flow smoothly. Even without too many cliffhangers, the story raises our curiosity.

Writing style at the start felt too simple. However, the words started flowing more smoothly as the chapters passed by. Overall, the writing style is nice and keeps us engrossed.

Grammar:

Story was grammatically perfect except for one typo in chapter 7.

Last words,

I thoroughly enjoyed reading the story. It was hard to stop once I started reading it. Will definitely add it to my library to read the future updates. Awesome work done.

Thanks for choosing me. Keep writing!!